Wednesday, 5 December 2012

My first attempt at HAIKU
































apple fell on head
while sleeping under the tree

Newton ,discovered the principle of gravity. 



































went for a bath, water dislodged

Archimedes ,said Eureka!!

A principle I've thought


























watch in the pan, egg held in hand

this is how inventions

on this earth land. 






































kettle begins boiling

steam comes through

Watt, says OH!!

a theory gets proved.



PS---hope they are HAIKU ::)))) ----haiku of 4 lines is called HAIKUA:))



all pictures from the net




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18 comments:

  1. Woman'n'Beyond5 December 2012 at 19:35

    very well attempted, Rajni. Though a typical haiku doesn't exceed 17 syllables(5-7-5). but don't bother about that, one learns that with time. (I am still learning).The way you have put them together is awesome.

    "watch in the pan, egg held in hand

    this is how inventions

    on this earth land."

    I loved the way you rhymed it! Keep writing!!

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:09

      Thanks Meenakshi----coming from you( the Haiku expert) its so very encouraging
      thanks once again
      regards
      rajni

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  2. Khoty Mathur5 December 2012 at 22:45

    don't know Haiku, Rajni, but enjoyed your poems.

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:10

      thankyou so much Kay Em

      that means a lot

      regards and good wishes
      rajni

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  3. TTT6 December 2012 at 19:14

    oh I just loved them !

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:11

      TTT

      thankyou so much
      those are encouraging words
      thanks once again
      regards

      rajni

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  4. Deepak Kripal6 December 2012 at 19:15

    loved'em Rajni.. 1st time read a scientific haiku..

    don't know much about haiku, Meenakshi has already given you some useful tips i see..

    but the lines were lovely nevertheless..

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:12

      Thanks Deepak

      if someone finds your works entertaining then that's all one wants '
      thanks once again
      regards
      rajni

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  5. Panchali6 December 2012 at 20:26

    nice...nice! The syllable counting makes me go wild! good ones, Rajni!

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:14

      Thanks Panchali

      frankly I too don't understand syllables etc for me all that i know of english is cosonants and vowels hahaha

      thanks for the visit
      seeing you after long hope you enjoyed your trip
      love
      rajni

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  6. indu chhibber7 December 2012 at 05:29

    Even i don't know haiku but i enjoyed your poem--nice attempt.

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 10:16

      Indu ji

      I wouldn't want anything more than what you have said if you have enjoyed it then that's all that matters

      thankyou so much
      regards
      rajni

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  7. varsha7 December 2012 at 20:16

    What a fun read! lol! keep it coming

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    1. Rajni Sinha7 December 2012 at 23:07

      thanks varsha

      so glad you liked them
      love
      rajni

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  8. Anupama K. Mazumder7 December 2012 at 23:26

    Brought back memories from school lessons. :)

    www.anucreations.blogspot.in

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    1. Rajni Sinha13 December 2012 at 10:07

      Thanks Anupama
      glad you liked it ----and here's a big welcome to you on my blogspace --please do keep visiting
      regards
      rajni

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  9. Zainab Ummer Farook28 September 2013 at 10:20

    Though I love your theme - the human thirst for scientific exploration - I'd like to point out that haiku do not exceed 17 syllables. Also, they don't rhyme.

    Brave first attempt! :) Keep going. Once you get the hang of it, this form is quite fun to play with.

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    1. Rajni Sinha29 September 2013 at 08:35

      thanks Zainab Ummer Farook

      for the visit ---I know they are not Haiku in the real sense and that they do not meet the requirements --but it was just a fun attempt---never tried again

      dont want to distort any form ---please read these just as fun

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